How does this thank you letter to an interviewer sound?

[Manager name]
Program Manager
Company Name
Adress
City, State, zip

Todays Date

Dear Name,

Thank you for speaking with me about the Program Facilitator Position at [company]. The position seems to be a great match for my skills and especially my interests.

My enthusiasm for helping children reach their full potential would be an important asset. It would enable me to put all of my resources and knowledge into the programs and curriculum that will benefit them greatly. I will utilize my high attention to detail, diligence, and self-motivation to ensure that the programs are successful and run efficiently.
I appreciate the time that yourself and [name] took to interview me. I am very interested in working with [company] and look forward to hearing from you about this position.

Sincerely,

My Name
Email Address
Address
City, State Zip Code

Also, is 'yourself and [name]' grammatically correct? Should it be 'you and [blank]'?🤔

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pentacorn · F Best Comment

sounds good, overall. change ‘will’ to ‘would’, and ‘yourself’ to ‘you’.

iamnikki · 31-35, F

@pentacorn How come? 'would' sounds like I'm uncertain. 'Will' sounds more like I am certain and confident. What do you think?

pentacorn · F

@iamnikki you use the word ‘would’ in the first and second sentences of your second paragraph. saying ‘will’ sounds presumptuous, to me. it’s up to you, though i would either change them all to ‘would or will’.

iamnikki · 31-35, F

@pentacorn Thank you! I wanted to be bold , becaue I'm usually not, and "claim" the job😄

But I'll change all 'wills' to 'woulds'. Greatly appreciated. Thanks!

pentacorn · F

@iamnikki yw ☺️
if it helps you to know, your letter does sound very confident, and it does retain that air with ‘would’. sure hope you get the job!

iamnikki · 31-35, F

@pentacorn Oh well thanks😅 Me too