I need an English man (or woman) #savemygrade

Bonjour! I need some help from a smart English/American man/woman. Because I could use a good eye on my attempt to type proper English. It’s a summary of my internship. I need it for school. Help me :(

If you help me you will rewarded with a picture of me kissing an alpaca :)

[b]Summary [/b]
[i]Hegron Cosmetics is a company that specializes in producing cosmetics products. Back in the 50’s there was a barber shop in Zaandam that made its own products. Customers were very excited about these products. Because of the positive reactions from the customers, the company started to market its products in the 60’s. Thanks to great success, the former hairdresser became a cosmetics producer. Nowadays known as Hegron Cosmetics
The company has several departments. For example the production, the inspection, the packaging / filling department and R&D (research and development). All four have an important role in producing products.
The R&D department deals with the development of products. They write recipes, make products and tests them.
Examples of this are:

•Stabilitytests to see if the product remains stable after three, six and twelve weeks.
• Xenon Tests to see if the product his color remains stable in full-spectrum sunlight.
• Cycletests to see how the product reacts in extreme temperature changes.
The equipment used at the R&D lab is:
• pH meter measures the acidity of a product that contains water. With a shower gel, the pH should be inbetween 4.8 and 7.2 depending on its conservation
•Viscosity meter to determine the thickness of a product.
•Q-sun Xenon Testing Chamber for the Xenon tests. To look at the stability of the color in a product.
When a product fails a test, they analyze what the problem is. When they find this problem, the recipe will be adjusted. When a product is approved, it may be produced.
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Jimmyorjames · M

Hegron Cosmetics is a company that specializes in producing cosmetics products. Back in the 50’s there was a barber shop in Zaandam that made its own products. Customers were very excited about these products, because of the positive reactions from the customers, the company started to market its products in the 60’s. Thanks to great success, the former hairdresser became a cosmetics producer. Nowadays known as Hegron Cosmetics.
The company has several departments, for example the production, the inspection, the packaging / filling department and the R&D (research and development). All four have an important role in producing products.
The R&D department deals with the development of products. They write recipes, make products and tests them.
Examples of this are:

•Stability tests to see if the product remains stable after three, six and twelve weeks.

• Xenon Tests to see if the product of his colour remains stable in full-spectrum sunlight.

• Cycle tests to see how the product reacts in extreme temperature changes.

The equipment used at the R&D lab is:

• PH meter measures the acidity of a product that contains water, with a shower gel, the pH should be inbetween 4.8 and 7.2 depending on its conservation.

•Viscosity meter to determine the thickness of a product.

•Q-sun Xenon Testing Chamber for the Xenon tests, to look at the stability of the color in a product.

When a product fails a test, they analyze what the problem is. When they find this problem, the recipe will be adjusted. When a product is approved, it may be produced.

On the whole, I think you did ok on your own. I want my alpaca now please 😉

Ticklemecrazy · 100+, M

Here Tellica - Checked

Hegron Cosmetics is a company that specializes in producing cosmetic products. Back in the 50’s there was a barber shop in Zaandam that made its own products. Customers were very excited about these products. Because of the positive reactions from the customers, the company started to market its products in the 60’s. Thanks to great success, the former hairdresser became a cosmetics producer. Nowadays known as Hegron Cosmetics.
The company has several departments. For example the production, inspection, packaging / filling and R&D (research and development) department. All four have an important role in producing products.
The R&D department deals with the development of products. They write recipes, make products and test them.
Examples of this are:

•Stability tests to see if the product remains stable after three, six and twelve weeks.
• Xenon Tests to see if the product his colour remains stable in full-spectrum sunlight.
• Cycle tests to see how the product reacts in extreme temperature changes.
The equipment used at the R&D lab is:
• pH meter measures the acidity of a product that contains water. With a shower gel, the pH should be in between 4.8 and 7.2 depending on its conservation
•Viscosity meter to determine the thickness of a product.
•Q-sun Xenon Testing Chamber for the Xenon tests. To look at the stability of the colour in a product.
When a product fails a test, they analyze what the problem is. When they find this problem, the recipe will be adjusted. When a product is approved, it may be produced.

Tellica · 22-25, F

@Jimmyorjames Hahaha thanks for the many tips. but isnt there like a way that you copy the tekst and just rewrite the wrong parts?