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Can you give me your opinion on this I'm not finished with it yet

I think about you All the time
Do you think about me too
I wonder why your not here
I love you so damn much
I wonder if you love me too
Somebody get me away from here
Somebody please
I'm falling apart without you here
I think about you all the time
Somebody get me
Somebody please get me away from here

I want to hold you in my arms all night
But your so far away
I love you so damn much
Do you love me too
I'd run away just to see you and hold you tight
But I can't
Sometimes life's so damn shitty

You said you would come see me
But you never did
You lied again
Now your just a pretty face gone with the wind
so now I'm moving on
and you're realizing your mistake
I'm walking away and saying goodbye

I loved you
I still do
But your so damn stupid
Somebody get me away from here
I'm so tired of living with these lies
I still think about you all the time

UnrestrictedHappy ·

I love the sentiment and the power of these words but I can't get the scan..struggling to find a tune that fits them and works with the pace of the written words. Awesome stuff though Holla keep up the great work!

SW-User

I see what you are doing with this song. It reminds me of U2's "till the end of the world". Gradually moving onto the next phase.

Love and hate are two sides of a coin and you are trying to sing about both of them. It's like your coin is flipping faster and faster. Almost too fast.

MarkPaul · 26-30, M

I like it... it captures the contradiction, frustration, and gut-wrenching pain of loving a crush: "I'm walking away and saying goodbye," "I loved you. I still do."