I wrote this. I changed one line. Please tell me what you think.

LIFE
No matter what hand you are dealt in Life
May it be disease, poverty or others causing you grief or mourning the loss of loved ones
Hold your head high and smile
Take Life by the horns and move right though
Don't let Life take you down or get you down
Knowing you have people that do care about you
Take each day by day knowing it is a new day and make the most of it.

No matter what hand you are dealt in Life
May it be disease, poverty or others causing you grief or mourning the loss of loved ones
Hold your head high and smile
Go forth and embrace Life knowing you have people that do care about you
Don't let Life take you down or get you down
Take each day by day knowing it is a new day and make the most of it.

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KaysHealingPath · 36-40, F

I think the second one is better. As a mother currently experiencing the grief of losing my babies there are some things you just can't "move through"
"Move on" or "get over" you simply learn to live with the new reality.

Rollercoaster97 · 51-55, F

@Tristemuneca: I'm truly sorry for your loss. I wrote this one because I had a friend just lose her brother. So I was trying to be comforting. If you need to talk you can message me.

KaysHealingPath · 36-40, F

@Rollercoaster97: thank you, but I think the best thing you can do to comfort someone you can about in their time of grief is say nothing, just open your heart and your arms, and hug them tight and tell them you understand. (And truly try and understand)
Also remember empathize don't sympathize.
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