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LIFE
No matter what hand you are dealt in Life
May it be disease, poverty or others causing you grief or mourning the loss of loved ones
Hold your head high and smile
Take Life by the horns and move right though
Don't let Life take you down or get you down
Knowing you have people that do care about you
Take each day by day knowing it is a new day and make the most of it.


No matter what hand you are dealt in Life
May it be disease, poverty or others causing you grief or mourning the loss of loved ones
Hold your head high and smile
Go forth and embrace Life knowing you have people that do care about you
Don't let Life take you down or get you down
Take each day by day knowing it is a new day and make the most of it.