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Any teachers here to maybe help explain a perplexing problem?

I wrote two essays for my college English class. The first one I half-assed on revising and editing. I'll admit that because I was really rusty. I've been out of school for about 11 years and trying to adjust to 8 week courses in an academic setting was stressful at best. I rushed that essay. The result was 7 points being deducted from a perfect score.

Then I wrote the second essay. I did refine it, even incorporating other skills I've learned through self study because I know I was capable of doing better. I listened to my professor's desire for a more lively voice versus the typical flat academic paper. That is definitely something in my wheelhouse because I write narrative prose, and that's an element of writing that's transferable. Also, I took special care in applying the three different type of appeals in this essay. The first one lacked pathos and ethos, so I was sure to add that in. Guess what? 7 points deducted.

I compared the rubric for both essays looking at the margins.
Body development: -3 points.
Structure & organization: -2 points.
MLA format: -2 points.
All of these were the same for both! I'm not entirely sure why the format didn't change because I did correct things in the second essay. This was after I skimmed through the 14 pages in the MLA handbook. Some stuff did not apply to the paper, others did. Otherwise, I copied the format mostly from the textbook example of an academic paper in MLA format.

I would've thought that the quality of the paper improving would reflect in the grading. I mean, it should have considering how raw the first essay was compared to the second. I'm perplexed. I already know what I'm going to do for my final one to get more insight. The university has resources for that. I just wanted to get people's opinions.
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CreyvinMoorhead · 36-40, M
The body of an MLA-formatted paper is structured to present a logical, evidence-based argument, characterized by consistent formatting, clear organization, and precise in-text citations
RedGrizzly · 26-30, F
@CreyvinMoorhead Agreed. That's why I'm going to run everything by the university's writing center to see exactly what's going on. It just baffles me that a raw draft scored the same to that of a refined paper. 😵‍💫
CreyvinMoorhead · 36-40, M
@RedGrizzly Assignments in stages and with drafts, I did it because the research is clear that staged work ends in higher quality research and writing . It also prevents people from trying to do all the research and writing at the last minute. There are ways to work within a staged process that doesn't lose the creativity and energy. There are rare people who can do excellent work at the last minute, but they are rare indeed -- there are far more people who think they can, but it is seldom so. The staged process is also far more effective at coming to understand the research process and how different drafts gave different focuses -- and that editing, then proofreading is a separate stage and can seldom be done at the same time as writing. Reviewing proposals, annotated bibs, and early drafts.
Ferric67 · M
@RedGrizzly I've always used writing centers
It's a great help
RedGrizzly · 26-30, F
@Ferric67 Absolutely. I'm going to make time for the writing center to give feedback on the final essay, then go from there. Apparently, there's a need for it since two completely different papers are at the same level according to the rubric. Lol