What do you think of this rap verse? Still working on it.

I had to miss a million times before I could hit the bullseye
Like young eagles we rise
But before we learned to fly, too many of us died
I’ve been through the bad and the worse
Through the terrible and beyond
Used to think a girl was what I needed to get my flow back
But the only thing I got was my fukkin heart cracked
It don't matter though, long ago it turned black
Now I'm all about my money and I'm too busy to look back