As both a songwriter and hopeless romantic I'd like feedback
I have always been a hopeless romantic along with being a songwriter, leading me to write songs about or for previous relationships. I am requesting feedback on a song I had written that documented a former such experience. Ultimately, we moved apart, but the song remains. Please share your thoughts if you find it relatable or any other feedback you would like to provide. The song is called...
Stolen Kiss
When we first met
When our paths first crossed
You gazed into my eyes
and my past was lost,
Each night my head was filled
With visions of your face
The starting gun just fired
and so begins the chase....
Chorus
I walked you to the car
Hands still shaking
Rolling the dice
For the chance I'm taking
Gazed into your eyes
Searching for a sign
Inside my head
Hoping it was the time
With an impulsive move
I took a big risk
and leaned down to your lips
For my first stolen kiss...
End chorus
Not sure what to think
Did I break the link
That led us to this place?
Your eyes become flustered
Mind in a tussle
Then a smile spread on your face,
"That wasn't in my plans,
you sneaky man,
I was planning on making you wait"
But how could I know?
Your beautiful face was aglow
So I broke down the starting gate
Chorus
I walked you to the car
Hands still shaking
Rolling the dice
For the chance I'm taking
Gazed into your eyes
searching for a sign
Inside my head
Hoping it was the time
With an impulsive move
I took a big risk
And leaned down to your lips
For my first stolen kiss.
End chorus
Later that night.
as I lay back in bed
Your lips occupying my mind.
I relived that stolen kiss,
forever etched in bliss
to fondly recall at anytime.
So the chase just began
Will I be your man
Or is this our sole memory?
I'm betting there is more
Still waiting in store
If you give your kisses to me.
Chorus
I walked you to the car
Hands still shaking
Rolling the dice
For the chance I'm taking
Gazed into your eyes
searching for a sign
Inside my head
Hoping it was the time
With an impulsive move
I took a big risk
And leaned down to your lips
For my first stolen kiss
Stolen Kiss
When we first met
When our paths first crossed
You gazed into my eyes
and my past was lost,
Each night my head was filled
With visions of your face
The starting gun just fired
and so begins the chase....
Chorus
I walked you to the car
Hands still shaking
Rolling the dice
For the chance I'm taking
Gazed into your eyes
Searching for a sign
Inside my head
Hoping it was the time
With an impulsive move
I took a big risk
and leaned down to your lips
For my first stolen kiss...
End chorus
Not sure what to think
Did I break the link
That led us to this place?
Your eyes become flustered
Mind in a tussle
Then a smile spread on your face,
"That wasn't in my plans,
you sneaky man,
I was planning on making you wait"
But how could I know?
Your beautiful face was aglow
So I broke down the starting gate
Chorus
I walked you to the car
Hands still shaking
Rolling the dice
For the chance I'm taking
Gazed into your eyes
searching for a sign
Inside my head
Hoping it was the time
With an impulsive move
I took a big risk
And leaned down to your lips
For my first stolen kiss.
End chorus
Later that night.
as I lay back in bed
Your lips occupying my mind.
I relived that stolen kiss,
forever etched in bliss
to fondly recall at anytime.
So the chase just began
Will I be your man
Or is this our sole memory?
I'm betting there is more
Still waiting in store
If you give your kisses to me.
Chorus
I walked you to the car
Hands still shaking
Rolling the dice
For the chance I'm taking
Gazed into your eyes
searching for a sign
Inside my head
Hoping it was the time
With an impulsive move
I took a big risk
And leaned down to your lips
For my first stolen kiss
