Don't Break

[i]I walked right on

The frozen pond

Never thinking of my sins

But then I felt the facts

Just like those spider cracks

Underfoot, in their icy skin

I don't break the lines

Though I'm on thin ice

I held my thoughts within

I'm melting with doubts

And time's run out

It's time to sink or swim[/i]

September 20th
My submission to writing prompt "Don't Break" ... I'm a day late!

Posted by @ChampagneOnIce

https://similarworlds.com/literature/4451080-September-Writing-Prompts-Here-are-prompts-for

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LadyGrace ·

You really did well.

CCMorgan · 51-55, M

@LadyGrace Thank you kindly ☺️ I appreciate it!

ChampagneOnIce · 51-55, F

[quote]I'm melting with doubts

And time's run out

It's time to sink or swim[/quote]

I feel this. Beautiful writing, as always.

CCMorgan · 51-55, M

@ChampagneOnIce Thank you so much! 🤗

Lostpoet · M

😌nice.

I like the imagery and underlying meaning, sins waying us down when we least want them to and even the cracking of the ice can be seen as a baptism or rebirth if you fall through.

CCMorgan · 51-55, M

@Lostpoet I really do appreciate your comment. I did see a few different meanings, but I really like what you found in it too! Thank you sincerely ☮️

Magenta · F

I always look forward to and enjoy your written expressions, as they are always interesting and full of feeling. Such as this. 💟 😊

CCMorgan · 51-55, M

@Magenta I always look forward to you finding my writings, and what you write about them 🤗 Thank you M!

CookieCrumbs · F

Your writing always touches my heart.

CCMorgan · 51-55, M

@CookieCrumbs Aww, that's great to hear 😌🤗 thank you!

CookieCrumbs · F

@CCMorgan
Why is this tagged nudity? Did you forget a photo? 😂

CCMorgan · 51-55, M

@CookieCrumbs Lmao!! The screen is hard to work with on my phone, for us old men 😂 must have hit the wrong button

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