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I Write Poetry

A novel you are for the ages
With worn in yellow pages
Every turn a new piece
Of you

Your topics abound
And your cover astounds
Even if it is tattered and worn
It’s still you

Dust covered, high upon a shelf
Forgotten by anyone but yourself
Try as you might to edit it alone
You cannot hide, you

Bookmarks riddle this story
Some chapters dense and gory
We see glimmers of hope
Because it’s you

And this book is not alone
For a library has been sewn
Stories collected from wishes
To figure out, you

For now, you sit and write
A prose riddled of foresight
With imagination run amok
To make a better you

What this author failed to see
The flaws delivered its beauty
The viscous theme of this work
Because you are you
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SW-User
I'm we with HME, and she knows far more about poetry than I do. But although I'm not great at writing it, I read a lot from friends and she's correct in her last assessment. Plus you have crisp line breaks and fluid brevity throughout!

The content is far better though. Using literature as a metaphor was perfection. I take something great away from it in each read as well. The first 3 stanzas are the strongest. Wonderful job, my friend! I'd love to see a sonnet from you one day soon, Mr! You're not far from the scheme and I must say, I love your use of the "you" refrains although each is different.. those add to the flow and tie stanzas together nicely, me thinks!😉
Serpico · 51-55, M
@SW-User Your compliments are well received. You also understand technique far better than I do.... I just write. Now you have given me something to ponder.
SW-User
@Serpico You're most welcome, my friend. You are a great poet. I don't know all that much actually, it's a running joke with others that I'm the improper poet. I write very little of it, but I'm willing to introduce you to different types. I know how they should be put together, but my high syllabus count is my worst enemy. You have no issues with measure at all though. It's the rule of most poetry, to have no more than 10 syllables to a line, the shorter the better. You have that nailed, buddy!

Truly, that girl down there ⬇️ can teach you far more...that's a poet!