A few lyrics from 1 of my songs... Would appreciate feedback
I have been writing songs for many years.
Are there songwriters on here that may offer constructive criticism?
I enjoy all feedback.
This is part of my song called...
CONSTANT COMPANION
A life spent being self-serving
left you undeserving
of the confirmation from others, you sought
Despicable as judge and jury
Your own perception so blurry
From the self-loathing endlessly fought
Masked your demons from all
Now your inevitable fall
Has overwhelmed your darkened soul
The wrong path was easily picked
but had consequences equipped
to extract with a life altering toll
Chorus
Rock bottom achieved
Never would have believed
A life built was so easily destroyed
Completely left broken
Needed words left unspoken
No one left to help fill the void
Left alone to assess your faults
Penetrated your minds vault
to reveal what influenced who you'd become
Clearly exposed some tragic events
now only addressed in past tense
Fully accepting what can't be undone
Now backtracking to the right path
maximizing the life you have left
To reconnect with those once abandoned
Shedding the depression, you've allowed
to change your smiles into frowns
No longer letting sadness be your constant companion
End chorus
Are there songwriters on here that may offer constructive criticism?
I enjoy all feedback.
This is part of my song called...
CONSTANT COMPANION
A life spent being self-serving
left you undeserving
of the confirmation from others, you sought
Despicable as judge and jury
Your own perception so blurry
From the self-loathing endlessly fought
Masked your demons from all
Now your inevitable fall
Has overwhelmed your darkened soul
The wrong path was easily picked
but had consequences equipped
to extract with a life altering toll
Chorus
Rock bottom achieved
Never would have believed
A life built was so easily destroyed
Completely left broken
Needed words left unspoken
No one left to help fill the void
Left alone to assess your faults
Penetrated your minds vault
to reveal what influenced who you'd become
Clearly exposed some tragic events
now only addressed in past tense
Fully accepting what can't be undone
Now backtracking to the right path
maximizing the life you have left
To reconnect with those once abandoned
Shedding the depression, you've allowed
to change your smiles into frowns
No longer letting sadness be your constant companion
End chorus