What's wrong with this story?
From Fox News, about a shooting on an Amtrak train. Quote:
"Magnus said the Counter Narcotics Alliance, a task force comprised of local and federal law enforcement agencies, boarded a New Orleans-bound Amtrak train stopped at a station in downtown Tucson around 8 a.m. to do a routine check for illegal guns, drugs, money, and other items. "
The wording of that sentence really sends chills up my spine. Bad writing? Or what?
"Magnus said the Counter Narcotics Alliance, a task force comprised of local and federal law enforcement agencies, boarded a New Orleans-bound Amtrak train stopped at a station in downtown Tucson around 8 a.m. to do a routine check for illegal guns, drugs, money, and other items. "
The wording of that sentence really sends chills up my spine. Bad writing? Or what?
41-45, M
