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Why didn't anyone read it, I really needed to see peoples thoughts on it cause I think it sounds too corny but maybe i shouldn't change it?

The highest form of love,
Could cover you up like a personalized serape,
Adequate, varicoloured with wilful delight, Agape!
Just like the acceptance of diverse strangers,
Agape means loving regardless of any controversies.
The distinctive badge of a powerful notion!

When the sky is azure, sunlight scattered by our atmosphere.
We fail to see the greater possible reaches far from near,
That would be the stars, the moon and everything past our sphere.
Similar to when we are blinded by our circle of familiarity,
Where we keep the rest out with the excuse of ‘them’ not being like us.
The sky is not the limit when there is an entire cosmic universe to visit.
Where would we be now if we loved and were loved without any attention paid in regards to if or not it is deserved?


If you look at a midnight sky,
A velvety sight well distributed, shiny and expensive.
You can see the beauty that can be seen in darkness. The potential that could be attained if agape was accepted would be impressive.
We are all stars, made up of the same fundamental pieces of matter.
Can you love with every particle of your being?
Will you exhibit light that can be appreciated from both near and far away?
Agape love is unimaginably immense.
I could express this love's arithmetical value by a word, symbol, or figure; it simply can't be done yet in my defense.
Trying to compose an agape love letter is like attempting to fully write down the figures in a googolplex.
The total amount of atoms in our currently known universe is less than the number of digits in what I am trying to express.
Do you choose to be part of the Agape emblem?
To work with others for the sake of greater good.
ravenwind43 · 51-55, F
I will be honest (hopefully) in a kind way...there are lines in here that are very good, but it feels chaotic and confusing in the meaning you are trying to convey. :)
Pureblossom · 22-25, F
@ravenwind43 good idea , any more critique? I'll take them all lol
ravenwind43 · 51-55, F
@Pureblossom Take each section as a single thought maybe? Like agape love in heart and minds then maybe a transition line and move into space and how it applies, then another transition line to nature. So, when it is read people can contemplate each section. Sometimes poetry just needs fine tuning. Always read it out loud to yourself too.:)
Pureblossom · 22-25, F
@ravenwind43 okay yea and lastly what did you like about it? Detail?

And I'm going to send you an se gift as a thanks what would you like ?

 
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