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Any teachers here to maybe help explain a perplexing problem?

I wrote two essays for my college English class. The first one I half-assed on revising and editing. I'll admit that because I was really rusty. I've been out of school for about 11 years and trying to adjust to 8 week courses in an academic setting was stressful at best. I rushed that essay. The result was 7 points being deducted from a perfect score.

Then I wrote the second essay. I did refine it, even incorporating other skills I've learned through self study because I know I was capable of doing better. I listened to my professor's desire for a more lively voice versus the typical flat academic paper. That is definitely something in my wheelhouse because I write narrative prose, and that's an element of writing that's transferable. Also, I took special care in applying the three different type of appeals in this essay. The first one lacked pathos and ethos, so I was sure to add that in. Guess what? 7 points deducted.

I compared the rubric for both essays looking at the margins.
Body development: -3 points.
Structure & organization: -2 points.
MLA format: -2 points.
All of these were the same for both! I'm not entirely sure why the format didn't change because I did correct things in the second essay. This was after I skimmed through the 14 pages in the MLA handbook. Some stuff did not apply to the paper, others did. Otherwise, I copied the format mostly from the textbook example of an academic paper in MLA format.

I would've thought that the quality of the paper improving would reflect in the grading. I mean, it should have considering how raw the first essay was compared to the second. I'm perplexed. I already know what I'm going to do for my final one to get more insight. The university has resources for that. I just wanted to get people's opinions.
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RedGrizzly · 26-30, F
UPDATE: I sent my final essay to the university's writing center for review. I did not have time for a full comprehensive review, but I at least got them to check for the format and document style. Fixed and submitted it. Then my instructor graded it, and actually provided annotations! Though, it's too damn late for that because the class term was already over.

The essay was scored worse than the first two, even though it improved according to the rubric. 😑 Instead of minus seven points, it was minus nine. Go figure. The stuff that it was docked on were really minor. One capitalization error that I somehow overlooked, block quote indentation error, and then a stylistic preference for the "P.I.E." structure. I'm not sure where the disconnect was considering every paragraph was: topic sentence, evidence, analysis, transition to next paragraph in a cohesive way. Regardless, I'm proud that the crap that she deducted on wasn't anything really detrimental moving forward. The P.I.E. thing wasn't talked about in that class, wasn't mentioned til now, and (after googling what the hell it is) it's still not a requirement. She didn't even mention it when she saw my outlines for all three of the papers, rather every outline got a perfect score. 🤷🏻 Anyway, that's the update! Mystery solved. Lol