I Do Not Feel
Deep within
Despite without
I do not feel
Anything
Nothing's akin
Feeling's drought
Heart like steel
Burying
Despite without
I do not feel
Anything
Nothing's akin
Feeling's drought
Heart like steel
Burying
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chilloutab2 · 41-45, M
Oh wow!!! One of the best poems I've read this year... definitely among the top on SW.
Lovely way to express the distraught feeling that comes from emotional numbness. Great control of metre and rhyme, too, which is so rare in poetry these days.
Just one suggestion - if I got the poem right, shouldn't the word "steal" in the second verse be spelt "steel"? That and the missing apostrophe in "Nothings", if I may nit pick.
Just lovely!
Lovely way to express the distraught feeling that comes from emotional numbness. Great control of metre and rhyme, too, which is so rare in poetry these days.
Just one suggestion - if I got the poem right, shouldn't the word "steal" in the second verse be spelt "steel"? That and the missing apostrophe in "Nothings", if I may nit pick.
Just lovely!
HikingMan · 51-55, M
Thank you. And yes, it should be steel not steal. I'll fix that. I have a ton of rhymes running around here. Feel free to read whatever.
chilloutab2 · 41-45, M
Yes I will... you indeed have some lovely poems on your profile.
Love you work. Thanks for sharing.
Love you work. Thanks for sharing.