I Am So Very Lucky To Be Loved, The Way My Husband Loves Me

@Hamuda1990:
I had some difficulty with trying to scroll and use the formatting, so I hope my editing is clear.
I've put the edited version first, and then a copy underneath with notes to explain the changes.
I hope you find it helpful.
Would love to read any other stories you might have written.
Do you love Nasrudin, The Thousand and One Night of Scherherazade, Hafiz, Rumi, Gibran, and Indries Shah? I do.
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The Blind Husband - And His Ugly Wife 

Once a man married a woman who was very, very beautiful. He loved her very much.

A time came when a disease spread through the land. It deformed the body of anyone who became infected.

One day, the beautiful wife noticed the symptoms of the disease, and knew that she had been hit by it and would lose her beauty.

But the man was outside the house and did not know what happened to his wife. On his way home he had an accident that caused him to become blind.

The man and the wife continued their life, day after day. The wife became more and more ugly, and the man did not know that the wife had turned into an ugly woman.

They continued their life for forty years with love and harmony, as if they were a newly married couple.

Until the day came when the wife died. The husband grieved and became devastated by the loss of his beloved.

When the funeral ended, it was time for everybody to go home.

The husband stood up and was leaving the place, alone, when suddenly somebody called to him, “Where are you going?”

The husband answered, “I am going home.”

The man became very upset and asked, “And how are you going home alone?” For he thought the husband was blind and needed someone to guide him.

The husband answered, “I am not blind! When I learned that she was hit by the disease, I feared that she would feel hurt by her ugliness, so I pretended blindness. Forty years… and I treated her with the same love as before she got ill.”
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[b]The Blind Husband - And His Ugly Wife [/b]

Once a man married a woman who was very, very beautiful. He loved her very much.
[punctuation.
When two adjectives in a row describe the same noun, we use a comma in between them.
We use only one full stop (called a “period” in American English) at the end of a sentence.
There is a punctuation mark called an “ellipse” which consists of three dots in a row. It is used at the end of incomplete speech to indicate that the speaker has been interrupted. An ellipse can sometimes be to indicate a gap or jump in time: overuse diminishes its meaning.]

A time came when a disease, that misshaped the body of the infected person, had spread.
[I have replaced the word “occurred” with the word “came.” This is not so much a matter of syntax as of normal usage. This is a little difficult to explain. Accidents can occur or happen, but time is not an accident or an event. Time can be said to “move,” to come or go, fast or slow, or seeming to stand still. It is perceived as moving or travelling. It is perceived as a dimension in which change or an event occurs, but not as an event or change in itself.
Syntax. The tense of a sentence, paragraph and story must remain the same. Thus if a sentence or story starts in the past tense, all the action of the story must continue in the same tense. Here, I have changed “misshapes” to “misshaped,” and “has” to “had.” The only exception to this is in dialogue, in which the character speaks in the tense relevant to what he or she is saying.
The whole sentence would sound more natural like this: “A time came when a disease spread through the land. It deformed the body of anyone who became infected.”]

One day, the beautiful wife felt the symptoms of the disease, and knew that she had been hit by it and had lost her beauty.
or
One day, the beautiful wife noticed the symptoms of the disease, and knew that she had been hit by it and would lose her beauty.

[The tense here is very complex. We cannot notice that we have symptoms unless we have already been infected, so we use the past perfect continuous. She understands the consequences, that she would lose her beauty, so the past conditional is used because it has not yet happened. It all takes place in the past, but within that past is a time line or sequence of events relative to each other, hence the variation in tenses which still conform to the rule of keeping the tense in the past.
Addition of “the” (i.e. the definite article) in front of ”symptoms” is necessary because it describes a specific disease, not just any disease.
Any phrase that describes time and/place is separated from the rest of the sentence with a comma.
Comma removed. The phrase “and knew that” describes both “had hit” and “lost” so we keep them together in meaning by not using a comma to separate them.
[Spelling. ‘Loster” needs to be “lost her.”]

But the man was outside the house and did not know what happened to his wife. On his way home he had an accident that led to the loss of his sight and he became blind.
or
On his way home he had an accident that caused him to become blind.
[Spelling. “Accedent” is correctly spelled “accident.”
“Was hit by” does not sound quite natural. A car can hit a pedestrian, or a thug might hit a victim, but in normal usage we say some “had” an accident.
Repetition. “Led to the loss of his sight” and “become blind” mean almost the same thing. Unless there is a special reason for using repetition, it is considered better writing to avoid it.]

The man and the wife continued their life, day after day. The wife became more and more ugly, and the man did not know what the wife had become.
or
The man and the wife continued their life, day after day. The wife became more and more ugly, and the man did not know that the wife had turned into an ugly woman.
[In English, it is possible to say that something is “an ugliness,” but would be rare and sound very odd. It would be more usual to speak of “the ugliness” of a specific condition, such as the effects of mange on a dog’s skin, or the loss of plants and nature in an industrial landscape.]

They continued their life for forty years with love and harmony, as if they were a newly married couple.
[The use of numerals is acceptable in memos and notes, but in fiction or formal writing it is correct grammar to write the number in the form of a word.
Brackets are only used to indicate an interjection by the writer or editor.]

Until the day came when the wife died. The husband grieved and became devastated by the loss of his beloved.
[“For” can be used as a synonym for “because,” so it is not completely incorrect in this context, but it is redundant, because the reader already knows the cause. The repetition of meaning is acceptable because it is used to emphasise the increasing strength of the feeling over time. So, in this context, the word “by” adds to the strength of that process of grieving.]

When the funeral ended, it was time for everybody to go home.

The husband stood up and left place alone when suddenly somebody called for him: Where are you going?
[For clarity about who stood up.]

The husband answered, “I am going home.”
[The correct way to write direct speech takes the following form.
Subject + verb, “Words spoken by the subject.”
There are many correct variations but the basic formula is that the spoken words are bracketed by quotation marks and then separated from who speaks them by a comma.]

The man became very upset and asked, “And how are you going home alone?” For he thought the husband was blind and needed someone to guide him.
[In this context, the word to “follow” means to “move or travel behind.” A person who was helping a blind man would either go ahead or beside him, but would not follow behind. In the case of helping a blind person to find his or her way, the correct word is “guide.”]

The husband answered, “I am not blind! I pretended being blind in order not harm my wife when I knew she was hit by the disease. I was scared that she would be hurt because of her illness so I pretended blindness. Forty years… and I treated her with the same love as before she got ill.”
[OK to use more than one exclamation mark in casual writing such as in texting, on social sites or in letters to friends but, in fiction and formal writing, is is correct to use only one exclamation mark.
Here the use of the ellipse, the three dots, gives correct emphasis to the passage of time and to the man’s emotions.]

Going through this for the sake of the grammar and meaning has had an interesting effect on me. It has led me to contemplate the story more deeply, to contemplate the logic and spiritual depth of a complex situation.
How difficult it would have been to tell such a lie and then live it for that length of time without being caught! For a blind husband, the wife would have to perform many tasks differently and perhaps take on the added burden of earning the family’s living, so her love is also very great. For the husband to maintain the fiction with everyone in the community, he would have to behave differently, always maintaining the pretence, and allow others to respond as they would. The enormity of it is phenomenal. So the story is not just about unconditional love, but also about the choices and consequences we make when motivated to lie, even for a loving cause.
Thank you for the beauty of your story.

@hartfire Thank you for your patience and efforts. 👏

@hartfire Went through your - about me. Looks like you are in your disappearance mode as of now (probably labor pains time), since few months and soon would be done with delivering your 8th baby.

*Congrats in advance*