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I Write Poetry

Cracked,
fra ctur ed,

and broken is this mirrored glass that hangs before me.
My gaze passes over the crowd of eyes looking back at me,
blank stares awaiting an answer to their question.

"What are we?"

Are we the contents of a ragged soul bound in scar tissue?

Are we a chaotic mind begging for peace?
Are we a lonely heart longing to hold someone till all our emptiness is filled?
Could it be we are just these words, made of similar letters,
yet our meanings are worlds apart depending on the reader.

Existing between the chapters of our life and death,
standing upon pages of the past, and buried under those of the future.
Perhaps we are but a single verse,
in the stanza of our life,
lost within the poetry of time.
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Very good can I make a couple suggestion?
Break up the lines more:

Cracked
fractured,
and broken
is this mirrored glass that hangs before me.
My gaze passes over
the crowd of eyes looking back at me,
blank stares
awaiting an answer to their question.
"What are we?"
Are we the contents of a ragged soul bound in scar tissue?
Are we a chaotic mind begging for peace?
Are we a lonely heart longing to hold someone till all our emptiness is filled?
Could it be we are just these words,
made of similar letters
yet our meanings are worlds apart depending on the reader.
Existing between the chapters
of our life and death, standing upon pages of the past,
and buried under those of the future.
Perhaps we are but a single verse,
in the stanza of our life, lost
within the poetry of time.

Eaiser to read that way is all...keep writing you are expressive

Another suggestion is to not use as many words short expample:
Cracked
fractured
broken
this mirrored glass hangs before me

Sometimes that makes it flow better ...

Wonderful use of emotion.

 
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