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What do i need to change about this poem, i feel like its not good enough yet.

Brave

When one falls, one must land eventually.
It's an ancient law after all.
The reason many are afraid to fall in love n the first place, most definitely.
Well, now, be brave.
Bravery and fear go hand in hand,
So you are one step closer to becoming brave.

Absorb and control the tone of your love acoustically,
Send forth your love accordingly into the air, directed towards them unreservedly.
Sweep your fingers and thumb across the strings of time.
As you feel your tremors let them exist next to your ability to love and let be loved.
Just because you are in love does not mean you’ve lost all control.
You will always have subconscious and conscious choice.
5thApprentice · 31-35, M
idk. But I like your subject matter
It needs more zing
Pureblossom · 22-25, F
@Oosure: zing 🤔
@Pureblossom: PERFECT! Don't change anything else!
Pureblossom · 22-25, F
@Oosure: Got it. thanks😘

 
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