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Just finished my "Godfather IV" screenplay. Critique?

Its really a Godfather Next Gen story. Young Donny the Twit is a small time hustler, down on his luck and been into the loan sharks from time to time. Because his father is connected they cant break his legs, so they stop throwing him a lifeline every time he comes up short. Anyway, next time it happens he goes to see this out of town Don, Don Vladimir, who lends him the money with the words. "I will do you this favour. And one day I might come ask you for a favour in return." So Donny nods and grins and takes the cash, struggling to hold it all in his small hands.
Skip forward a while and Donny gets a call from Don Vlad. "Hey Donny.. How would you like to be President?" So they talk and Vlad tells him about how he gets things done and how his computer geniuses can help tilt the wheel the way they do in Vegas and Donny is hooked, seeing a TV show and a lot of free publicity in this, but never thinking he will get up. Fast forward to the White House. Young Donny sitting there stunned.. The red phone rings and its Don Vlad, with an offer Donny the Twit cant refuse. He has to rat out his entire old gang so Don Vlad can take over.. I Picture a closing scene with Young Donny going up the street in his old neighbourhood with a flamethrower and grenade launcher destroying everything, Limping horribly from a recurrence of the Bone Spurs that have plagued him his whole life, blowing up buildings and screaming . "Forgetaboutit" and "Fake Nooz"
So what do you think??🤔

 
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